Major Project Progress

I have been working on improving my draft for the last couple of weeks, rectifying problems and attempting to make sense of any discrepancies. Unfortunately, Sir and I were only able to get through my first two argument the last time we met. Therefore, it is difficult to pinpoint the aspects of my major which need work. I have addressed the issues identified in my last blog, however I'm quite unsure how to improve my project further - though I'm certain it still needs a LOT of work. I feel as though my essay is still very airy and general at a stage when it needs to be precise, succinct, condensed... you get the point. I really need to back up my arguments, add substance and make sure I'm expressing my views in an accurate way. This is very difficult as I feel as though no matter how hard I try to get the words out, it still lacks emphasis. I will continue working on my second draft and hopefully everything will become a lot clearer.