Major Project Progress

Sir had asked me to improve my first annotation and edit a small portion of my synopsis. Apart from this, all the feedback has been quite positive. I am working on cutting down my essay which has proved quite laborious but will hopefully assist with the succinctness of it all. So, what needs to be done:

1. First annotation must be reworded so that it is more direct and informative, less vague etc etc. I will do this by remaining succinct and avoiding generalisations.
2. The synopsis is perfect (okay, a bit of an overstatement but at this point it's nice to be positive) except for the last sentence which sir found a little patronising. I agree so "This will allow the reader to gradually develop a more balanced and comprehensive understanding of the intent of sixties drug users whilst simultaneously highlighting the discrepancies between historical works." Will either be edited out or changed to something more sophisticated. Perhaps I will merge the last two sentences to create, "Each source will be compared and contrasted progressively throughout the essay in order to highlight the discrepancies which exist between different historical works. " Hopefully, this will work.
3. I need to nominalise my sentences, pronto!!